[Bug 783284] [NEW] About Kubuntu Docs Review

[Steven Richards]

Public bug reported:

Binary package hint: kubuntu-docs

More bugs or things that need to be looked at for the About Kubuntu
section

About Kubuntu - Introduction to Kubuntu
Same paragraph as "Welcome and Thank You" 
Example of Kubuntu Desktop picture appears to be missing
Second paragraph is a huge run-on, consider rephrasing

Philosophy:
- The team behind the Ubuntu and Kubuntu projects makes the following commitments to its users:
+ The team behind the Ubuntu and Kubuntu projects make the following commitments to its users:

-Kubuntu includes the best translations and accessibility infrastructure that the free software community has to offer to make Kubuntu usable by as many people as possible.
+Kubuntu includes the best translations and accessibility infrastructure that the free software community has to offer in order to make Kubuntu usable by as many people as possible.

Kubuntu is committed to the principles of free software and open source development; we encourage people to use free and open source software, improve it and pass it on.
^Missing comma after "improve it"

What is Linux?

- Linux is an operating system kernel that resembles the UNIX operating
system. The kernel is the main software required for free operating
systems such as Kubuntu. Linux has become a leading element of the
worldwide movement to embrace free and open source software. The term
"GNU/Linux" is another way of referring to the Linux kernel; it was
created by the Free Software Foundation, because the Linux kernel was
created with many components from the GNU Project.

+ Linux is an operating system kernel that resembles the UNIX operating
system. The kernel is the main pieace of software required for free
operating systems such as Kubuntu to exist. Linux has become a leading
element in the worldwide movement to embrace free and open source
software. The term "GNU/Linux" is another way of referring to the Linux
kernel; it was created by the Free Software Foundation, because the
Linux kernel was created with many components from the GNU Project.

What is KDE?

The first paragraph is mostly one large run-on, consider shrinking the examples of KDE's products.
-KDE 4's full-featured applications run natively on Linux, BSD, Solaris, Windows and Mac OS X. 
+KDE 4's full-featured applications run natively on Linux, BSD, Solaris, Windows, and Mac OS X. 

Switching Desktops:
- there is a choice between using the GNOME Display Manager (GDM) or the KDE Display Manager (KDM) as the login manager. 
+ there is a choice between using the GNOME Display Manager (GDM) or the KDE Display Manager (KDM) while at the login manager.

** Affects: kubuntu-docs (Ubuntu)
     Importance: Undecided
         Status: Confirmed

** Changed in: kubuntu-docs (Ubuntu)
       Status: New => Confirmed

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  About Kubuntu Docs Review