Internet

[Phil Bull]

Hi Dougie,

On Mon, 2007-09-10 at 15:45 +0100, Dougie Richardson wrote:
> Finally done. I've mostly just updated information and tweaked the
> layout. Wireless is completely different and a lot of information has
> been added. I've expanded modems a little, but there is too much
> information to incorporate in the time frame.

I've reviewed your patch and found a few small issues which you might
like to take a look at:

 * The names of the sections about connecting to a network don't refer
specifically to 'connecting to the Internet', so some users may overlook
them. This could probably be remedied with a small section before
Networking Basics called Connecting to the Internet, as we had
previously. This would just have a list of the different connection
methods with links to the relevant sections to help people find their
way to the right topic.
 * It might be worth including a brief sentence where appropriate which
describes what the Network Manager icon looks like (both wired and
wireless icons). I can see people having problems finding it.
 * The text inside a few multiline <screen> tags has been indented, so
appears indented in Yelp.
 * I'm not sure about this at all, but you may need to edit /etc/modules
so that the ndiswrapper module is loaded at start-up.
 * "If you recieve a message" -> "If you receive a message"
 * Maybe change the title of 'Using NDISWrapper' to 'Using Windows
Wireless Drivers'

Apart from those, it's a massive improvement from the original state of
the document and the patch should be committed ASAP. I especially like
the Troubleshooting section.

Thanks,

Phil

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